Minha inspiração para desenvolver a tese era praticamente nula, e a nota 3,5 não foi uma surpresa. Me esforçando para tirar pelo menos uma nota 6, que é a máxima.
Segue abaixo minhas considerações e avaliações:
ESSAY
One
aspect that caught my attention throughout the story of Dracula was the
strength of the friendship and the determination that came from it,
resulting from a common evil. In this case, the heinous attacks of the
evil Count. The bonds of love that unite friends is so strong that
extend beyond this life, because they are willing to commit acts which
at first sight may seem insane, as in the case of killing the body of a
loved one so that the soul could be saved.
At the time of Bram Stoker the vision of the world was basically dualistic or Manichean. Good and evil, light and darkness, all the "opposites", as it were easily identified in the book (see quote 1). "Man" is considered "strong" and "woman", "weak", a vision and totally masculinity but - unfortunately - is consistent with the time when the book was written.
Is very interesting to track Seward comments about Renfield, because as he sees it, sometimes, minds seemingly insane, hide glimpses of sanity which are not seen by those who seek or think they have total sanity (see quote 2).
Another interesting factor is when Van Helsing says that Count Dracula has a child’s mind despite of all the knowledge acquired through the centuries. Such mind is driven by selfishness and inconsequence.
Although a good story, I found the characters extremely superficial and without a deep character, except for R. M. Renfiel, the madman. The relationship between the characters is extremely artificial. As the story is narrated through the journals of the characters, it is difficult to accept that all of them have the same literary style when writing their reports. Another point which I found extremely flawed in the narrative through the journal style, is quoting complete sentences as an omniscient narrator.
Quote 1 - Until you have suffered through the night, no man knows how grateful and sweet is to the heart and eyes the morning light. [Jonathan Harker]
Quote 2 - I'm starting to wonder if my long habit of living among the insane would influence my own mind. [Dr. Seward]
FORM REVIEW
At the time of Bram Stoker the vision of the world was basically dualistic or Manichean. Good and evil, light and darkness, all the "opposites", as it were easily identified in the book (see quote 1). "Man" is considered "strong" and "woman", "weak", a vision and totally masculinity but - unfortunately - is consistent with the time when the book was written.
Is very interesting to track Seward comments about Renfield, because as he sees it, sometimes, minds seemingly insane, hide glimpses of sanity which are not seen by those who seek or think they have total sanity (see quote 2).
Another interesting factor is when Van Helsing says that Count Dracula has a child’s mind despite of all the knowledge acquired through the centuries. Such mind is driven by selfishness and inconsequence.
Although a good story, I found the characters extremely superficial and without a deep character, except for R. M. Renfiel, the madman. The relationship between the characters is extremely artificial. As the story is narrated through the journals of the characters, it is difficult to accept that all of them have the same literary style when writing their reports. Another point which I found extremely flawed in the narrative through the journal style, is quoting complete sentences as an omniscient narrator.
Quote 1 - Until you have suffered through the night, no man knows how grateful and sweet is to the heart and eyes the morning light. [Jonathan Harker]
Quote 2 - I'm starting to wonder if my long habit of living among the insane would influence my own mind. [Dr. Seward]
FORM REVIEW
Student 1 →
It's written on the average level I've seen around this class, there's
some odd grammar, and a typo or two, but you use the words correctly.
The quotes aren't exactly correct, though I'm assuming that's from a
different version of the book.
Student 2 →
Acceptable structure but some trouble with few mistakes: e.g. "The
bonds of love that unite friends is so strong that extend beyond this
life" should be "The bonds of love that unite friends ARE so strong that
THEY extend beyond this life".
Student 3 →
Some errors in grammar and punctuation spoil the flow of an otherwise
well written piece. Use of words is good and I approve of making the
best use of your space by separating the quotes.
Student 4 → The third paragraph needs to be reviewed. The subject of the first verb is missing.
CONTENT REVIEW
Student 1 → This is more of a book report than an enriching essay, and you have many seemingly-unconnected points.
You say things are interesting without explaining why they're interesting,
Try for more background about what you're writing.
Student 2 →
You just write your opinion about this book. The aim of the essay is to
state a thesis, bring arguments to support it and fdrive a conclusion. I
don´t see any of it.
Student 3 →
The writer has acquired knowledge of the simplistic outlook of
Victorian novels and this point is very valid in reading any work of
this period. However s/he seems to have allowed this to override other
considerations . This essay would help me understand the book -
unfortunately it would not tempt me to read it in the first place.
Student 4 →
Good finding inside of the book however they are not properly linked
together to form a solid argumentation. They neither give insight on the
introductory thesis nor in the conclusion.
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